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2014年9月6日雅思写作解析及原创范文

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  2014年9月6日雅思写作解析及原创范文

  2014年9月6日雅思写作题目

  小作文:动态柱图:4个国家40年来接受援助的对比

  大作文:

  With major cities continue growing,are there any problems to young people? How to solve these problems?年轻人面对的问题以及如何解决?

  薛鹏点评:开放类写作,只要自圆其说,没有固定答语。如果写作小鹏哥预测的题目学生择业难的影响和解决,就是原题压中。

  可以谈及的文章主题:

  1. 大学生择业难的原因和解决

  2. 年轻人不健康的原因和解决

  3. 年轻人不快乐的原因和解决

  4. 年轻人学习压力大的原因和解决

  5. 青少年犯罪的原因和解决

  相关题目:

  In many countries, more and more young people are leaving schools and unable to find jobs after graduation. What problems do you think youth unemployment will cause to the individual and the society? And make some suggestions. 许多的学生离开学校找不到工作,失业对于社会和个人的影响是什么?

  薛鹏原创范文:(大学生择业难的原因和解决)

  首段:背景介绍 + 问题影响 + 写作目的

  Alarmingly, it is far from easy for college graduates to secure ideal jobs and countless college job candidates feel frustrated when seeking for a reasonable career. The crisis of the youth employment has been exerting a baneful influence on those gifted college leavers and the harmony of the community. This essay aims to explore the possible reasons of youth unemployment and then present my personal recommendations. (66)

  薛鹏点评:首段写作年轻人面对的成长问题之一是就业难,谈及其对应个人和社会的不良影响,再表达本文的写作目的。

  薛鹏解析:

  1. Alarmingly, it is far from easy for sb to do sth 令人担忧的是,某人做……很难

  2. get a reasonable career 找到理想的工作

  3. …… has been exerting a baneful influence on …… and the harmony of the community …… 一直对于……和社会的和谐造成不良影响

  4. gifted college leavers 有才化的大学毕业生

  5. This essay aims to explore the possible reasons of …… and then present my personal recommendations. 本文将会探究下…… 的原因,再提出个人的建议

  二段:问题原因的展开:

  Virtually, a number of factors explain the hardship of college graduates’ employment. First, the pressure of youth unemployment could be owed to the fact that the supply of college graduates far outweighs the demand of the society. Specifically, countless university job-seekers are competing for limited positions. Further, some enterprises suffering from economic downturn are reducing staff and cutting down the plans of recruiting new employees. Meanwhile, the demand of some corporations for job candidates grows continuously, eye-dazzling academic qualification or rich working experience could all serve as excellent examples. Eventually, the incompetence of some college job-hunters and improper career concepts account for the truth that jobs are challenging to get. (110)

  薛鹏点评:

  二段写作年轻人择业难的三个原因:(从客观原因谈及主观原因)

  1. 大学生求职者供过于求,很多的大学生求职者在竞争有限的工作岗位

  2. 一些经济低迷的企业在裁员,减少员工招募,同时,企业对于年轻求职者的要求不断提高,例如要求高学历以及丰富的工作经验

  3. 一些年轻人本身能力不强,心态不健康解释了为何工作难寻

  薛鹏解析:

  1. virtually, a number of factors explain …… 实际上,很多原因解释 ……

  2. first, …… could be owed to the fact that …… ,第一, …… 可以被归结为……

  3. some enterprises suffering from economic downturn 一些遭遇经济低迷的企业

  4. reduce staff 裁员

  5. cut down the plans of recruiting new employees 减少了招募新员工的计划

  6. the demand of …… grows continuously …… 的要求不断增加

  7. eye-dazzling academic qualification 惹眼的学历

  8. rich working experience 丰富的工作经验

  9. …… could all serve as excellent examples …… 可以被当做是完美的例证

  10. …… account for the truth that …… , …… 解释了……的事实

  三段:问题的解决:(针对问题原因的三个解决策略)

  Considering the severity of youth unemployment it is time that we adopted some effective measures. First, it is imperative for the government to enact relevant legislations to balance the supply and the demand of the college students. Meanwhile, the government is urged to provide college leavers with preferential policies so that those ambitious college job-hunters could carve out their own careers. Further, efforts should be made by relevant enterprises, they should create more on-the-job training chances for youngsters and properly lower criteria in selecting college job-seekers. Ultimately, undergraduates ought to study even harder and adjust their mentality in terms of career choice. More precisely, every college student should excel academically and strive from the bottom of the society. (118)

  薛鹏点评:

  三段论证年轻人择业难的解决策略

  1. 政府立法,平衡大学生的供求,政府给有梦想创业的年轻人提供优惠的政策

  2. 企业应该给年轻人提供在职工作培训的机会,同时,企业应该降低对于大学生求职者的要求

  3. 大学生应该个人努力,精通专业知识,调整就业心态,从底层奋斗

  薛鹏解析:

  1. Considering the severity of …… it is high time that we adopted some effective measures 考虑……的严重性,是我们采取有效措施来解决问题的时候了

  2. it is imperative for the government to enact relevant legislations to …… 政府颁布相关立法去……是势在必行的

  3. the government is urged to provide college leavers with preferential policies 政府应该给大学毕业生提供优惠的政策

  4. carve out their own careers 自我创业

  5. efforts should be made by …… 努力应该有……做出

  6. create more on-the-job training chances 创造更多的在职培训的机会

  7. properly lower criteria in …… 在……方面降低标准

  8. study even harder 努力学习

  9. adjust their mentality in terms of career choice 调整择业心态

  10. excel academically and strive from the bottom of the society 精通专业知识以及从社会底层奋斗

  尾段:亮明作家立场:强调协同努力才能解决问题

  In a nutshell, it is no easy task to help every young job-hunter to secure an ideal job. Concerted efforts should be made by the government, the relevant companies and every college job-seeker. Only in this way can crisis of youth unemployment be tackled properly. (45)

  薛鹏点评:

  尾段强调年轻人择业难要求三方共同努力:政府,企业,个人。

  薛鹏解析:

  1. in a nutshell, it is no easy task to …… 总之,做 …… 绝非易事

  2. secure an ideal job 找到理想的工作

  3. concerted efforts should be made by …… , …… ,and …… ,三方应该共同努力去 ……

  4. only in this way can …… be tackled properly 只有以这样的方式,…… 才能被恰当解决

  全文点评:

  雅思写作题目一般是和年轻人成长,教育,就业息息相关,本文的提问角度为开放类角度,很多主题都可以谈及,学生择业难是社会类最热点话题之一,也是年轻人面对的重要问题,论证起来容易有感而发。前期准备语料库丰富,观点清晰,建议现场写作。9月6日雅思题目没有直接问及学生择业难的影响和解决(或者是原因和解决),因此,学生择业依然为遗落话题,建议背诵小鹏哥原创语料库,尤其是精彩的衔接词汇和固定短语。

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